高考英语语法:高中英语语法-英语习作评析
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英语习作评析
一、习作要求
假如你叫婷婷，下面是你收到的你祖母从加拿大寄来的信。请你根据来信的内容写一封回信。
September 12， 2003
Dear Ting Ting，
I had a letter from your mother a few days ago， but she didn't give me much news about you.
She said you went on an ecology summer camp. When I heard that you had seen a snake， I was worried. I hope someone killed it！
I was sorry to hear that you had hurt your knee. How did that happen？ I hope it is better now.
I know your birthday is coming soon， so I am enclosing a check for you. Write soon and tell me what you decide to do with the money. I want you to spend it on something nice.
With lots of love.
Yours，
Grandma
注意：
1. 词数： 120 左右；
2. 参考词汇：生态学 ecology .
二、学生习作：
September 28， 2003
Dear Grandma，
Thank you for your letter and the check. It was really kind of you to send me so much money.
I spent one week at an ecology summer camp in the countryside. Yes. We did saw （ 1 ） a snake. Five of the boys let it out （ 2 ） . I was excited when they did it.
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Thank you for your good wishes about my knee. In that afternoon （ 3 ） ， after I returned back （ 4 ） to school， I fell over on the stairs. It was not serious and getting （ 5 ） better now.
Since I am very interested in nature， I've decided to cost （ 6 ） the money you sent me on a telescope. I can use it observing （ 7 ） natural things. Will that be all right？
With lots of love.
Yours，
Ting Ting
三、习作点评：
1. 优点：习作者能准确运用书信格式，文中人称、动词时态使用正确。作者能根据来信中所涉及的主要问题，全面地表达了回信的主题内容。该习作语言表达较为流畅，作者能尽量运用英语课本中所学过一些句式、短语进行表达，如 Thank you for … ， It was really kind of you to do … ， We did see … ， spend the money you sent me …等，是一篇较好的习作。
2. 不足之处：（ 1 ）该篇习作也出现了一些语法、词句及意义表达方面的错误，具体表现在：（ 1 ） saw 改为 see .这是一种陈述句结构的强调形式，在这种句型结构中，用了助动词 do /does /did 以后，原来的动词形式要改为原形。又如： He does often come to see us. （他确实常来看我们。） We did go to the party last night. （我们昨天晚上确实去参加了晚会。）（ 2 ） let it out 改为 drove it away . let out 意为“放掉、泄露”， drive away 意为“赶走”。（ 3 ） In that afternoon 改为 That afternoon .在 this， that ， every， next， last 等所限定的时间名词前常不用介词。（ 4 ） returned back 改为 turned back 或去掉 back .（ 5 ）在 getting 前加上 it is .此处 getting 与前面 was not serious 不为并列动词时态，而是强调现在，应用现在时。（ 6 ） cost 改为 spend .当句中主语为某人时，常表达为“ sb. spend money / time on sth. / in doing sth. ”表示“某人花钱或时间干什么”注意 cost 的主语一般为某物。（ 7 ） observing 改为 to observe .该动词由句中 use 决定其结构，构成 use sth. to do sth “用……来干……”。（ 2 ）该习作语言句式的表达稍有些简单，如作者能将该习作的某些句子加以调整，运用一些较高级的句子，再在某些句子之间加上一些过渡语来加以润色，效果会更好。如在文中 Five of the boys 前可加上一个过渡性的词语 Fortunately ， five of the boys …；文章的最后一段… I've decided to spend the money you sent me on a telescope. I can use it …这两个句子可合并成一个非限制性定语从句；… on a telescope， which I can use to observe …，这样，将会使整个文章更具有连贯性、得体性和可读性。
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四、修改后的习作
September 28， 2003
Dear Grandma，
Thank you for your letter and the check. It was really kind of you to send me so much money.
I spent one week at an ecology summer camp in the countryside. Yes. We did see a snake. Five of the boys drove it away. I was excited when they did it.
Thank you for your good wishes about my knee. That afternoon， after I returned to school， I fell over on the stairs. It was not serious and it's getting better now.
Since I am very interested in nature， I've decided to spend the money you sent me on a telescope. I can use it to observe natural things. Will that be all right？
With lots of love.
Yours，
Ting Ting
五、习作训练：
下面是某中学生英语报刊登的一封读者来信，请你以编辑的身份给这位中学生写封回信。
Dear Editor，
I spend most of my time studying. I hardly talk to my classmates. Sometimes I think I am not so concerned about others， but there are times that I do want to talk. I just don't know what to talk about and how to begin a conversation.
I feel so lonely. How I wish I had a good friend！
Yours，
Jinjing
回信的内容应包括以下要点：
1. 要相信自己。你最大的问题是缺乏自信。
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2. 对同学面带微笑，使他们相信你是友好的。
3. 先试着和一个与你同样害羞的或与你有同样爱好的同学谈话。
4. 可以向同学问一些学习上的问题，谈谈共同的爱好。
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