新gre作文2012：GRE作文范文大全（151）
GRE写作成为横在中国学生的理想和现实之间的一大障碍，因此，如何攻克写作这道屏障，成为摆在我们面前的首要任务。
A final problem with the argument involves Rutherford's increase in its students' grades the
year after that district discontinued music programs. This increase might be attributable to
numerous factors. Perhaps that year Rutherford received substantial funding to enhance its
after-school tutoring program; or perhaps it hired more effective teachers that year. Or perhaps
the outgoing graduating class one year was less bright overall than the incoming freshman
class the next year. Any of these scenarios, if true, would discredit the author's assertion that
music education contributes to lower academic grades. Besides, the author cites an increase
during only one year--an insufficiently small range to draw any reliable general conclusion.
In sum, the author's argument for discontinuing music education is weak. To strengthen the
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argument the author must show that the cited statistics about Solano students reflect their lack
of interest in music rather than some other phenomenon, and that the increase in Rutherford's
grades were the result of its discontinuing music education.
Argument 120
The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.
"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by
15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city
utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing
companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest
way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to
provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to
relocate here."
This article argues that the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate its economic development
and reduce unemployment would be to provide the same kinds of tax and financial incentives
for business as the incentives which the city of Dillton began providing 18 months ago. Dillton's
incentives included a reduced corporate tax rate as well as relocation grants and favorable
utility rates for businesses willing to relocate to DiUton. The article points out that during the
last 18 months two manufacturing companies, which together now employ 300 people,
relocated to Dillton. The argument is logically unconvincing in several respects.
To begin with, the argument depends on the assumption that the two businesses moving to
DiUton did so because of Dillton's new incentives--rather than for some other reason. Yet
lacking evidence to the contrary it is entirely possible that the two businesses were morivated
primarily by Dillton's climate, labor pool, or some other factor. Without ruling out all other
reasons why the two businesses might have relocated to DiUton, the argument that BeauviUe
can entice businesses to move to BeauviUe by offering similar incenrives is dubious at best.
Even if it was Dillton's new incentives that enticed the two manufacturers to Dillton, the
argument relies on the further assumption that the two firms' relocating to Dillton in fact had a
beneficial impact on the city's economy. Yet the only evidence the article offers to substantiate
this assumption is that the two manufacturers now employ 300 people. Perhaps those 300
employees left other jobs in DiUton to go to work for those two finns; if so, then the incentives
had no positive impact on Dillton's employment rate. Or perhaps other businesses have left
Dillton during the last 18 months, taking even more job opportunities with them. For that matter,
perhaps on average more businesses relocated to DiUton each year prior to DiUton's
establishing the new incentives than afterwards. In short, without more information about
DiUton's economic conditions and employment level both before and after the incentives were
established it is impossible to assess whether those incentives had a positive or negative
impact--or any impact at all--on DiUton's overall economy. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（151） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。GRE写作成为横在中国学生的理想和现实之间的一大障碍，因此，如何攻克写作这道屏障，成为摆在我们面前的首要任务。
Even if Dillton's new incentives did in fact serve to help Dillton's economy, the arride unfairly
assumes that similar incentives will carry a similar result for BeauviUe. It is entirely possible
that the two dries differ in ways that would undermine the effectiveness of similar incentives for
BeauviUe. For instance, perhaps BeauviUe's labor pool is smaller; or perhaps unemployed
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BeauviUe residents would be less willing or able to go to work if offered the chance. Without
accounting for such differences any analogy between the two cities is premanare, and any
conclusion based on that analogy is unjustified. Furthermore, the author's inference that
incentives which were effective in the past will also be effective in the future rests on the poor
assumption that during the last 18 months all conditions upon which their effectiveness
depend have remained unchanged. Perhaps the general economy is expected to turn down.
Or perhaps other dries have recently begun to provide similar incentives. Indeed, the fact that
DiUton is already providing these incentives might actually portend failure for Beauville, which
might need to devise even stronger incentives to convince businesses to move to BeauviUe
rather than Dillton.
Finally, the article fails to consider any other course of action that might help Beauville attain
the same economic goals. Perhaps by improving its schools or hospitals, or by reducing its
crime rate, BeauviUe can just as quickly and effectively attract new businesses and achieve its
economic objectives. In short, without weighing the proposal against alternatives, the artide's
daim that the proposed incentives are the "best" means of achieving Beauville's objectives is
wholly unconvincing.
To sum up, the article has not convinced me that the proposed incentives would be the best
way for Beauville to achieve its economic goals. To bolster the argument the article's author
must provide clear evidence that Dillton's incentives--and not some other phenomenon-were in
fact responsible for stimulating Dillton's economy during the last 18 months. To better assess
the argument I would need to know what other conditions in Beauville that were not present in
Dillton might dissuade businesses from moving to Beauville--despite the proposed incentives.
I would also need to compare near-term economic forecasts with economic conditions during
the last 18 months. Finally, I would need to consider the proposed incentives in light of
alternative courses of action.
Argument 121
The following appeared in a memorandum from the president of Mira Vista College to the
college's board of trustees.
"At nearby Green Mountain College, which has more business courses and more job
counselors than does Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year's graduating seniors had job
offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only 70 percent of the
seniors who informed the placement office that they would be seeking employment had found
full-time jobs within three months after graduation, and only half of these graduates were
employed in their major field of study. To help Mira Vista's graduates find employment, we
must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job
counselors to help students with their resumés and interviewing skills."
This letter recommends that in order to improve its job placement record Mira Vista College
should offer more business and computer courses and should hire more job counselors. To
support this recommendation the author points out that at Green Mountain College 90 percent
of last year's graduates had job offers, but that only 70 percent of Mira Vista seniors who
reported that they planned to seek employment had jobs within three months after graduation,
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and only half of these graduates were employed in their major fields of study. This argument is
problematic in several critical respects. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（151） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。GRE写作成为横在中国学生的理想和现实之间的一大障碍，因此，如何攻克写作这道屏障，成为摆在我们面前的首要任务。
First, the author assumes that Green Mountain's comparatively strong job-placement record
is due to the fact that it provides more business courses and job counselors than Mira Vista,
rather than some other factor. But this need not be the case. Perhaps Green Mountain
students are exceptionally bright or resourceful to begin with. Or perhaps the quality of
instruction and job counseling at Green Mountain is exceptionally high. Moreover, perhaps
Green Mountain provides more business courses and job counselors than Mira Vista simply
because Green Mountain is a larger school with more students; if so, then the comparative
numbers are not likely to have any bearing on job-placement success. In short, without ruling
out other possible explanations for the difference between job-placement rates, the author
cannot reasonably conclude that additional business courses and job counselors would
enhance Mira Vista's job-placement record.
Another problem with the argument is that the statistics comparing job placement rates
might be distorted in one or more respects. First, the author fails to indicate the percentage of
Green Mountain graduates who find employment in their major fields of study. Without this
information it is impossible to assess the comparative success of the two colleges in helping
their recent graduates find such employment. Second, the author ignores the possibility that
the time parameters defining the two schools' job-placement rates differ. Mira Vista's record
was determined only three months after graduation. It is entirely possible that Green
Mountain's record was based on a longer period of fi_me, thereby distorting the comparative
success of the schools in helping their recent graduates find jobs.
The cited statistics about Mira Vista's job placement record might be unreliable in other
respects as well. These statistics were based only on data from Mira Vista seniors who
reported to the college's job-placement center. The author overlooks the possibility that only a
small portion of Mira Vista seniors reported to begin with. The author also ignores the
possibility that many of these reporting students later changed their minds about seeking
employment or were offered jobs but turned them down. Without ruling out these possible
scenarios, the author cannot reasonably rely on these statistics to support the claim that Mira
Vista's job-placement record is comparatively poor and thus could be improved by Mira Vista's
emulating Green Mountain.
In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must
show that additional business courses and job counselors would in fact improve Mira Vista's
job-placement rate, and that the comparison between the job-placement rates at the two
schools is fair. Finally, the author provides no evidence whatsoever to support his
recommendation for providing more computer courses; to justify this claim the author must
provide supporting evidence.
Argument 122
The following appeared as an editorial in the local newspaper of Dalton.
"When the neighboring town of Williamsville adopted a curfew four months ago that made it
illegal for persons under the age of 18 to loiter or idle in public places after 10 p.m., youth crime
in Williamsville dropped by 27 percent during curfew hours. In Williamsville's town square, the
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area where its citizens were once most outraged at the high crime rate, not a single crime has
been reported since the curfew was introduced. Therefore, to help reduce its own rising crime
rate, the town of Dalton should adopt the same kind of curfew. A curfew that keeps young
people at home late at night will surely control juvenile delinquency and protect minors from
becoming victims of crime." 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（151） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。
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