新gre红宝书2012：GRE作文范文大全（91）
Gre写作是美国所有作文考试中时刻最长而质量要求最高的一类作文考试，而在短期内提高gre写作能力不是一天两天可以完成额，所以我们在备考2011新gre写作时必然要对问题问题深切的剖析，体味以下优异范文的文章结构，以提高新gre写作的整体分数。
To further support her claim the author cites the fact that Adams sold more properties last
year than Fitch. However, the author overlooks the possibility that last year's sales volume
amounted to an aberration, and that in most other years Adams has actually sold fewer
properties than Fitch. Moreover, the disparity in sales volume can readily be explained by
factors other than the comparative quality of the two fkrrns. Perhaps Adams serves a denser
geographic area, or an area where turnover in home-ownership is higher for reasons unrelated
to Adams' effectiveness. Or perhaps sales volume is higher at Adams simply because it
employs more agents, and each Adams agent actually sells fewer homes on average than
each Fitch agent does. Without ruling out such alternative explanations for the disparity in
sales volume, the author cannot defend the conclusion that based on this evidence that
Adams is superior to Fitch.
In further support of her claim the author points out that the average sales price of a home
sold by Adams is greater than the average price of a home sold by Fitch. However, this
evidence shows only that the homes that Adams sells are more valuable on average than the
ones that Fitch sells, not that Adams is more effective in selling homes than Fitch. Moreover, it
is possible that a few relatively high-priced or low-priced properties skewed these averages,
rendering any conclusions about the comparative quality of the two firms based on these
averages unfair.
For additional support the author points out that it took Fitch Realty considerable longer to
sell one of the author's homes than it took Adams Realty to sell another one of her homes ten
years earlier. However, this disparity is explainable by other plausible factors, such as
changing economic conditions during that ten-year period, or a difference in the desirability of
the two properties. Without establishing that all other factors affecting the speed of a sale were
essentially the same for the two homes, the author cannot rely on this limited anecdotal
evidence to support her daim.
In conclusion, the author's evidence lends litde credible support to her claim. To persuade
me that Adams is better than Fitch, the author would need to provide clear evidence that
individual Adams agents are more effective in selling homes than individual Fitch agents, and
that the disparity in home sales and sales price is attributable to that difference. Finally, to
better evaluate the author's claim we would need more information comparing the percentage 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（91） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。Gre写作是美国所有作文考试中时刻最长而质量要求最高的一类作文考试，而在短期内提高gre写作能力不是一天两天可以完成额，所以我们在备考2011新gre写作时必然要对问题问题深切的剖析，体味以下优异范文的文章结构，以提高新gre写作的整体分数。
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of agents working part-time at Fitch versus Adams. We would also need more information
about the comparative attractiveness of the author's two homes, and the extent to which the
residential real-estate market changed during the decade between the sale of these two
homes.
Argument 5
The following was written as a part of an application for a small business loan by a group of
developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the
nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local
market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended
Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the
highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Finally, a
nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz
entertainment. It is clear that the C Note cannot help but make money."
This loan applicant claims that a jazz club in Monroe would be a profitable venture. To
support this claim the applicant points out that Monroe has no other jazz clubs. He also cites
various other evidence that jazz is popular among Monroe residents. Careful examination of
this supporting evidence, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the applicant's
claim.
First of all, if the demand for a live jazz club in Monroe were as great as the applicant claims,
it seems that Monroe would already have one or more such clubs. The fact that the closest
jazz club is 65 miles away suggests a lack of interest among Monroe residents in a local jazz
club. Since the applicant has not adequately responded to this concem, his claim that the
proposed club would be profitable is untenable.
The popularity of Monroe's annual jazz festival and of its nightly jazz radio show might
appear to lend support to the applicant's claim. However, it is entirely possible that the vast
majority of festival attendees are out-of-town visitors. Moreover, the author provides no
evidence that radio listeners would be interested in going out to hear live jazz. For that matter,
the radio program might actually pose competition for the C-Note club, especially considering
that the program airs during the evening. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（91） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。Gre写作是美国所有作文考试中时刻最长而质量要求最高的一类作文考试，而在短期内提高gre写作能力不是一天两天可以完成额，所以我们在备考2011新gre写作时必然要对问题问题深切的剖析，体味以下优异范文的文章结构，以提高新gre写作的整体分数。
Nor does the mere fact that several weU-known jazz musicians live in Monroe lend
significant support to the applicant's claim. It is entirely possible that these musicians perform
elsewhere, perhaps at the club located 65 miles away. This would go a long way toward
explaining why Monroe does not currently have a jazz club, and it would weaken the
applicant's assertion that the C-Note would be profitable.
Finally, the nationwide study showing that the average jazz fan spends $1,000 each year on
jazz entertainment would lend support to the applicant's claim only if Monroe residents typify
jazz fans nationwide. However, the applicant provides no credible evidence that this is the
case.
In conclusion, the loan applicant's argument is not persuasive. To bolster it he must provide
clearer evidence that Monroe residents would patronize the C-Note on a regular basis. Such
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evidence might include the following: statistics showing that a significant number of Monroe
residents attend the jazz festival each year; a survey showing that fans of Monroe's jazz radio
program would go out to hear live jazz if they had the chance; and assurances from
well-known local jazz musicians that they would play at the C-Note if given the opportunity.
Argument 6
The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Clearview newspaper.
"In the next mayoral election, residents of Clearview should vote for Ann Green, who is a
member of the Good Earth Coalition, rather than for Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview
town council, because the current members are not protecting our environment. For example,
during the past year the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have
increased, and the local hospital has treated 25 percent more patients with respiratory
illnesses. If we elect Ann Green, the environmental problems in Clearview will certainly be
solved."
This editorial recommends that Clearview residents vote to replace city-council member
Frank Braun with Ann Green, a member of the Good Earth Coalition. To support this
recommendation the editorial cites a significant increase during the last year in the number of
Clearview factories and in the number of Clearview hospital patients treated for respiratory
illnesses. On the basis of this evidence the author infers that the current council members are
not protecting the city's environment and that electing Green will solve the city's environmental
problems. This argument is logically flawed in several critical respects.
To begin with, the argument unfairly assumes that last year's increase in the number of
factories was due to the city council's decisions--rather than to some other phenomenon-and
that this increase poses environmental problems for Clearview. The editorial provides no
evidence to substantiate these assumptions. Lacking such evidence it is entirely possible that
the council actually opposed the increase but lacked adequate authority to prevent it, or that
the new factories do not in fact harm Clearview's environment. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（91） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。
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