2012gre作文大讲堂：GRE作文范文大全（111）
GRE写作部分将重点考察考生有针对性地对具体考题做出反应的能力，而非要求考生堆砌泛泛的文字。具体说来，这些重点关注的能力包括：1、 清楚有效地阐明复杂观点；2、 用贴切的事理和事例支撑观点；3、考察/验证他人论点及其相关论证；4、支撑一个有针对性的连贯的讨论；5、控制标准书面英语的各个要素。写作部分将联合考察逻辑推理和分析写作两种技能，并且将加大力度引进那些需要考生做出有针对性的回应的考题，降低考生依赖事前准备（如背诵）的材料的可能性。
Since the author provides no firm evidence that replenishing sand and protecting nearby
buildings would be more beneficial to Tria's tourist industry than allowing nature to take its
course, I do not find the author's argument the least bit compelling.
In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it the author must show
that charging beach-access fees would reduce the number of beachgoers, but not to the
extent of undermining the goal of raising sufficient funds to maintain an attractive coastal area.
The author must also provide better evidence that replenishing sand would indeed protect
nearby buildings, and that the net result would be the enhancement of Tria's tourist industry.
Argument 41
The following is from an editorial in the Midvale Observer, a local newspaper.
"Ever since the 1950's, when television sets began to appear in the average home, the rate of
crimes committed by teenagers in the country of Alta has steadily increased. This increase in
teenage crime parallels the increase in violence shown on television. According to several
national studies, even very young children who watch a great number of television shows
featuring violent scenes display more violent behavior within their home environment than do
children who do not watch violent shows. Furthermore, in a survey conducted by the Observer,
over 90 percent of the respondents were parents who indicated that prime-time
television--programs that are shown between 7 p.m. and 9 p.m.---should show less violence.
Therefore, in order to lower the rate of teenage crime in Alta, television viewers should
demand that television programmers reduce the amount of violence shown during prime time."
This editorial concludes that increasingly violent television programming during prime time in
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the country of Alta is responsible for the steady increase in violent crime among Alta's
teenagers. To support this conclusion the editorial cites various statistical studies about
violence on television. However, this evidence provides little credible support for the editorial's
conclusion.
To begin with, the editorial observes a correlation between violence on television and violent
teenage crime, then concludes that the former is the cause of the latter. However, the editorial
fails to rule out other possible explanations for the rise in violent crime among teenagers. For
example, since the 1950s it is entirely possible that Alta has seen a large growth in its
population, or a deterioration of its juvenile justice system or economy. Any of these factors, or
other social, political or economic factors, might lead to an increase in violent crime among
teenagers. Without ruling out all other such factors it is unfair to conclude that television
programs are responsible for this increase. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（111） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。GRE写作部分将重点考察考生有针对性地对具体考题做出反应的能力，而非要求考生堆砌泛泛的文字。具体说来，这些重点关注的能力包括：1、 清楚有效地阐明复杂观点；2、 用贴切的事理和事例支撑观点；3、考察/验证他人论点及其相关论证；4、支撑一个有针对性的连贯的讨论；5、控制标准书面英语的各个要素。写作部分将联合考察逻辑推理和分析写作两种技能，并且将加大力度引进那些需要考生做出有针对性的回应的考题，降低考生依赖事前准备（如背诵）的材料的可能性。
Next, the editorial cites studies showing that young children exposed to violent images are
more likely to behave violently in the home. This evidence would support the editorial's
conclusion only if teenagers and younger children react similarly to television. However,
common sense tells me that young children are more likely than teenagers to mimic observed
behavior. Moreover, the editorial fails to provide any evidence that this sort of mimicry
ultimately develops into violent criminal behavior.
The editorial then cites the Observer survey in which "90% of the respondents were parents"
who would prefer less violent television programming during prime time. However, the editorial
fails to provide any information about the survey population; therefore it is impossible to
determine whether the survey results apply generally to the Alta population. In addition, we are
not informed how many parents were surveyed but did not respond. The greater this number,
the less reliable the survey. Thus, as it stands the Observer study is statistically unreliable and
lends no credible support to the editorial's conclusion.
Aside from the survey's statistical unreliability, in citing the survey the editorial assumes that
parents' preferences about television programming have some bearing on whether their
teenage children will commit violent crimes. However, the editorial provides no evidence to link
one with the other. Moreover, the survey is relevant only to the extent that teenagers watch
television during prime time. However, the editorial provides no evidence about this extent.
In conclusion, the editorial is unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the
editorial's author must rule out all other possible factors contributing to the rise in teenage
violence. The author must also show that teenagers react to violent television images similarly
to how younger children react to the same images, and that Alta teenagers watch a significant
amount of television programming during prime time. In order to better evaluate the argument,
we would need more information about the Observer survey population, and about the
percentage of those surveyed who responded. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（111） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。GRE写作部分将重点考察考生有针对性地对具体考题做出反应的能力，而非要求考生堆砌泛泛的文字。具体说来，这些重点关注的能力包括：1、 清楚有效地阐明复杂观点；2、 用贴切的事理和事例支撑观点；3、考察/验证他人论点及其相关论证；4、支撑一个有针对性的连贯的讨论；5、控制标准书面英语的各个要素。写作部分将联合考察逻辑推理和分析写作两种技能，并且将加大力度引进那些需要考生做出有针对性的回应的考题，降低考生依赖事前准备（如背诵）的材料的可能性。
Argument 42
The following appeared in the editorial section of a health and fitness magazine.
"In a study of the effects of exercise on longevity, medical researchers tracked 500
middle-aged men over a 20-year period. The subjects represented a variety of occupations in
several different parts of the country and responded to an annual survey in which they were
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asked: How often and how strenuously do you exercise? Of those who responded, the men
who reported that they engaged in vigorous outdoor exercise nearly every day lived longer
than the men who reported that they exercised mildly only once or twice a week. Given the
clear link that this study establishes between longevity and exercise, doctors should not
recommend moderate exercise to their patients but should instead encourage vigorous
outdoor exercise on a daily basis."
This editorial concludes that to maximize longevity people should engage in vigorous
outdoor exercise on a daily basis. To support this conclusion the editorial cites a 20-year study
of 500 middle-aged men in which, among subjects responding to an annual survey, those who
followed this regimen lived longer, on average, than those who exercised mildly once or twice
per week. A careful analysis of the study reveals several problems with the editorial's
argument.
First of all, the excerpt provides no information about the number of respondents or their
occupational or residential profiles. The fewer respondents, the less reliable the study's results.
Also, the narrower the spectrum of occupations and geographic areas represented among
respondents, the more likely that one of these two phenomena, rather than exercise, played
the key role in the subjects' longevity. Moreover, once a subject dies it would be impossible for
that subject to respond to the annual survey. Unless a sufficient number of subjects from
diverse geographic areas and occupations responded accurately and on a regular basis, and
unless accurate responses were made on behalf of deceased subjects, I simply cannot accept
the editorial's condusion.
Secondly, a 20-year time span might not be sufficient to gauge the longevity of the study's
subjects; that is, until a significant number of subjects have died, it is impossible to determine
with certainty the effect of exercise on the subjects' longevity as a group. Lacking information
about how many deaths among the 500 subjects were reported by the end of the study, it is
impossible to draw any reliable conclusion about the relationship between exercise and
longevity.
Thirdly, the editorial fails to indicate how many or what percentage of the respondents
engaged in vigorous outdoor exercise on a daily basis. Lacking this information, it is entirely
possible that only a few subjects matched this profile and that those few subjects happened to
live to an old age--due to some factor other than exercise habits. The longevity of a small
number of respondents is scant evidence upon which to draw any broad conclusions about the
effect of exercise on longevity. 感谢您阅读《GRE作文范文大全（111） 》一文，查字典出国留学网()编辑部希望本文能帮助到您。
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