这样修改留学简历更好
发布时间：2016-03-10来源：查字典留学网
最近谈了很多留学简历方面的内容，因为多年来看到许多学生不太重视留学简历的写作，习惯把中文简历直接翻译成英文，认为这样就可以了。事实上，一份好的简历不仅内容要全面，而且格式也要漂亮。今天，我将结合具体的事例加以分析，希望同学们能从中受益。
未修改前原文：
RESUME
Name: Y** *** Marital Status: Single
Date of Birth: **/**/**** Health: Excellent
Place of Birth: Beijing Sex: Female
Nationality: People's Republic of China
Tel: 0086-10-6******9
E-mail:m******@gmail.com
Mailing Address:
P.O.BOX 086-****, Agricultural University, 100084, Beijing , P.R. China
Objective: computer control system, Robotics,CIMS (computer integrated manufacturing system ) CAD/CAM, Manufacturing system, MEMS
Education:
Sept. ****- June, ****: The Junior High School of Peking University
Honors: Class monitor (3 years)
Honorable excellent student in school ( 3 years)
Honorable excellent student in Beijing
Honorable excellent cadre in Beijing
Rank 1st in class
Sept.**** - June.****: The Senior High School of Peking University
Honors: Class monitor (3 years)
Honorable excellent student in Beijing
Honorable excellent cadre in Beijing
Chairman in student union
Honorable excellent cadre
The first-class scholarship (3 years)
Rank 2st in class (60 students)
Sept. ****- Oct. ****: Sydney Senior High School, Australia
I was chosen from 500 students to study in this overseas school as an exchange students
During this period, I learn lot from my foreign classmates.
Obtained more knowledge about Australia
My spoken English was much better when I came back from Australia
Sept. **** - June.****: Peking University
Honors:
The First-Class scholarship for 3 consecutive years
Associate chairman in Student Union of my department
Cadre in my class taking responsibility for organizing activities .
Major GPA: 3.8
Working experience:
Sept.**, ****, interpreter (50 0ut of 2000) in China International Trade Fair for Sanitation, Heating, Air-conditioning
Teaching Assistant of two students in the high school
Research Assistant in Lab. of Computer Control System and Automation
a volunteer serving in the center of collecting donation and clothings for victims in the floods during summer in **** by Red Cross
Interests Include:
Music: pop music, singing, playing the clarinet and harmonica
Sports: a member in the softball team of department
playing volleyball, badminton, Ping-pong, etc.
Swimming, skating.
Else: Collecting stamps, reading
之后，在我的帮助下，Y同学自己修改了简历。改后的简历无论在语言还是版式上都有了很大幅度的改善。
修改后简历：
Mr.Y**
Address: P.O.BOX 086-***8, Agricultural University, Beijing , P.R. China,100084
Tel: 0086-10-6******9 Cell phone: 0086-13*********
E-mail:******@gmail.com
Objective
To enter Ph.D. studies at TM University, focusing on computer control systems, robotics, CIMS, CAD/CAM, manufacturing systems.
Education
1. Peking University, Sept. ****- June ****
Major in Computer Science, Major GPA : 3.8/4.0
Honors:
* Outstanding Student Scholarship for 3 consecutive years
* Associate Chairman of Student Union for my department
* Class Representative, responsible for organizing activities
2. Sydney Senior High School, Australia, Sept ****- Oct. ****
* Chosen from 500 to study overseas as an exchange student
(one of 10 high school students)
* Obtained overseas exposure and learning
* Improved spoken English greatly
Experience
Research Assistant: Computer Control System and Automation Lab
Interpreter: **** China International Trade Fair for Sanitation, Heating, Air-conditioning
Tutor: Two high school students
Relief worker: Red Cross relief efforts for victims of the **** summer floods
Y同学按照中国人的思维方式写了留学简历的初稿，给读者的感觉是重点不突出，比较杂乱。由于Y同学申请留学时还是位在校大学生，经历很简单，所以要想让评审委员会的成员通过看他的简历增加读其他材料的兴趣，就必须对这篇简历做一个全面修改。我们的修改建议如下：
1．把他的通信地址和联系方式放在简历的“Heading”部分并做成页眉，使个人联系信息简洁，一目了然。
2．利用“Objective”这项，明确他要申请的学校和他感兴趣的专业领域。这样做的好处是，评委们从简历中一眼就能看出他的申请方向。
3．在教育背景一项中，原稿从小学写到了大学。一般来讲，在申请硕士学位以上的留学简历中，主要从大学的教育背景写起，小学和中学的教育经历是不用写的。但是，对于在中学或高中阶段曾经获得过国家级奖项，或者被选拔到国外学校培训或学习的经历，是可以写进简历中的。Y同学在高中阶段曾作为交换学生到澳大利亚的一所学校学习一个月，因此我们保留了这段经历，而把他原稿中的中学和高中部分的其他教育经历删掉了。
4．在第四部分“Experience”中，把Y同学在校期间的兼职经历整理后写在一起，使它更清晰、醒目。对于工作经历和研究经历丰富的申请者，可以把工作经历和研究经历以及业余活动分成几个单项来写，在本章简历模板部分有很多这样的例子。
5．在语言上，写简历一般省略主语，主要使用短句（偶尔也用长句）。因此，改后稿删掉了主语“I”，而主要使用动词来描述申请者具体的工作，并使这些动词保持平行结构。如：Chosen from，Obtained，Improved。
6．在版式上，建议Y同学使用横线分隔各部分，使整个简历不至于因为内容简单而显得单薄。
最后，她成功地申请到了美国三所大学的全奖。（连载中……）